A bath of heat, a vision of red and yellow
Danced and trembled against the faces
Of dark and concealed figures
Only blurred sunlight, stripes of colour leapt into visibility.
They passed like shadows under the darkness
With the silence of the forest, amid the shadows of beasts.
Towards the lagoon, among the creepers and broken trunks
Along the shore they carried themselves.
Darkness was a place of scar
Hearts shaking, violence approaching and noises squeaking
But they had no fear
Life was visible among them
They delightfully laughed and fiercely continued on their hunt.
Bushes crashed ahead
Tusks gleaming, shouting boys.
Clouds opened to let down rain
The desire to squeeze and hurt was over-mastering
hesitating, blood was staining the sand.
Pale skin reddens under the burn of the slanted sun,
Sweat and grime, calluses and raw skin,
Bodies craving the taste of meat and the comfort of a home,
Order and structure lost to the chaos of desperation
Alone, lost, fearful, and yet so free.
Video Link:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6LF6IVpZROk&feature=youtu.be
Good artwork!I really enjoyed the fact that you incorporated the setting with the atmosphere opposed to just picking one. I think it happened to work to your advantage as it helped create a better understanding of the environment of the novel.
ReplyDelete-Mason
The artwork is amazing,it really helped me understand the setting of the novel better. I really liked the tone you said the poem in.nicely done
ReplyDelete-Laura
I thought that the constant juxtaposition of light and dark imagery, as well as the changes in atmosphere, really worked well for your poem.
ReplyDelete-Marko
Such a descriptive poem! With the artwork, the details help me to imagine the boys' lives clearly. Loved it.
ReplyDeleteHenry
The artwork is fantastic! You guys were able to really describe the environment of this island. Impressive!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very well arranged. However, I feel that a better title than "Lord of the Flies" should be used, because I don't think the entire poem is centred on the beast itself, but rather on the actions caused by the evil within the hearts of the boys. I really like the establishment of freedom at the end though, to provide a nice contrast from the previous imagery. Very nicely done.
ReplyDelete- Vincent T.
I think the art really worked with the found poem.
ReplyDeletefeedback for the next poem: Check out the rubric: Create an original title; indicate in the subtitle the source and author pages and contributors to the project. Video was nicely done though maybe the volume/sound needed to be tweaked. It was a bit faint/too soft to hear